Hyuuga Maikeru

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Name:Hyuuga Maikeru

Age:13

Gender: Male

Village: Village hidden within the leaves

Rank:Genin

Nature Manipulation:Fire

Appearance:

Clothing

Michael stands at about 5"11 wearing a locket around his neck that lets him know he is trying to live up to his parents reputation. Michael wears his Ninja Head band on his forehead a along with a wristband on his right wrist. Michael often is seen with a pair of Black pants on often around the village. Lastly he often always wears a blue shirt to complete his uniform.

Physical
Michael is pretty well built for someone his age probably due to the fact that he is constantly training day in and day out. Michael though dose have a scar on the near bottom of his right eye due to a training incident that happened once. he often has his hair covering that eye often why his hair is covering his right eye.


Personality:
Freindly-Maikeru is what you would call a friendly person. he always stands up for his friends from anyone picking on the for a reason so far fetched it ain't funny. He is also always willing to make new friends so will always introduce himself first before you will get a chance to introduce yourself. More or less Maikeru always puts his Friends and Family above himself to make sure they are all safe even if they say they do not not need the help he will help you anyways. To sum it all together Maikeru is one of those people who you would want as your Friend even if you dont admit it.

Flirty-Maikeru more or less is what you would call a flirt with the oppisite sex to say the least. it has often led to him getting slapped or what not but he dosent let that stop him. he is doing this because he knows one way or another that there is one girl out there who will actually not react like that and he will know than that that girl is the one for him. Once he finds that one girl that he believes is the one for him he will.

Determined-Maikeru lastly is what you would call determined. Either it be trying to win a girls heart or complete a mission or whatever he will always make sure to job is complete and never back down or quit until the job is done weither he is in bad shape or not he will always make sure to get the job done even if it means risking life and limb to get so he goes by the motto "If you get hurt during a mission you simply where not strong enough" and works to get stronger so that he will not get hurt next time.



Jutsu:
Clone Technique
Body Replacement Technique
Body Flicker Technique
Transformation Technique

Temporary Paralysis Technique
Leaf Gale
Rotation
Shadow Shuriken Technique

Byakugan
Gentle Fist
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History: Maikeru was born into the Hyuuga Clans Main ranch 13 years ago. His family was that of tifani and jon and was often trained with him as Maikeru did not just want to have to be protected by someone in the cadet branch and have cursed with having to protect them he figured they could live a good life if he could defend himself. Maikeru offten trained by himself so he could enter the academy the best he could.

At Age 5 His speed had increased drastically from when he had first started his training not many people could keep up with him with just their bare eye it was hard to believe that someone so young could possess such tremendous speed yet he did posses that speed and it showed his determination.

At age 8 Maikeru would than attended the Academy to become a leaf Ninja. Maikeru always focused mostly on his grades and such to show not all Main Branchers needed protecting from the Cadet Branch. Michael planed on proving that but first he had to graduate the Academy. That was easier said than done but at age 13 he did as he had graduated the academy with flying colors.

Maikeru now works as a Ninja hidden in the leaves trying some way some how to show his parents that not all Main Branchers need protecting from the cadet branch and he could protect himself as it was said in In Maikeru's words "Tradition was meant to be broken." and he was going to be the first to break no matter what.

RP Sample: Hyuuga Maikeru Sighed as he was siting on a stump. He had finished his training for today as his father's words rang though his head. why did he think that why did dad have to think their was only one path for the Main branch. He sighed and shook his head oh well that was dads choice of but whatever he stood up as he tightened his headband before speaking to himself again.

"Well time to get back to go back to training" Maikeru said to himself as he stood up and sighed before activating his byakugan and began training once again it was all he had to do with no missions on the moments he made sure that he could get as much training in as possible no matter what it took alot out of him but he always made sure he was in tip top shape for any mission.

Notes: apps never my strong suit lol

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Name: Check. In the future, however, we'd like for the name to be Japanese.

Age: Check. Please keep this section in mind as you read the history, however.

Gender: Check.

Village: Check.

Rank: Check. Please keep this section in mind as you read the history, however.

Nature Manipulation: Check.

Appearance: He wears green shit? *titters* Alrighty, sorry about that; I'm done being immature. What I was getting at, though, is that it would be much appreciated if you employed the use of the spell check. So, few things that I'd like to see modified;;

1 ;; even if the character won't show anyone what's in the locket, we the people in the OOC world need to know what it is.

2 ;; if you're going to say that Michael has a scar, that's fine; lots of ninja have scars. However, if you're going to say that it's one big mystery, then we have an issue. The point of character applications are to give we the readers a better understanding of the character, and if you're going to disclose any information, you need to disclose it all the way. No playing half-sies.

3 ;; There aren't sneakers in the Naruto universe - everyone wears sandals, or goes barefoot.

4 ;; I'm having a hard time visualizing Michael's hair, do you think you could describe it a little bit more, to give me a better understanding of what it looks like? You obviously want me to have an idea of what it looks like, but as it is, the idea's incomplete.

5 ;; The minimum requirement for the personality section is two paragraphs. As it is, your second paragraph falls a little bit short. If you fill out what I've mentioned above, this shouldn't be a problem, but I want you to keep this in mind as you do so.

Personality:

1 ;; You say that Michael is mysterious, but you don't really explain how Michael is mysterious. This seems to be a major point of his personality, and yet you hardly go into it. I'd like to see more whys and wherefores.

2 ;; You say that Michael tends to be a nice guy. How is he nice. What makes him a nice guy? Could elaborate?

3 ;; Again, two paragraphs is the minimum requirement for the section, and you're just barely scraping by with hardly anything at all. I would recommend going a little more in depth with the character, maybe describing how he behaves around others as opposed to how he behaves alone, or with children, or with elders, and etc. You could insert his likes and dislikes, his favorites, what he's like during missions, during a fight. Explore him!

Jutsu: First off, if you could link the jutsu to a page, that would be awesome. LeafNinja or Naruto Wikia are win.

1 ;; The lesser branch of the Hyuuga clan should not possess the 8 Trigrams jutsu; Neji was a bit of a prodigy, if you'll remember. I would suggest different jutsu for Michael.
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History: Well, the history's shorter than I'd like, and it focuses a little too much on the canon characters, rather than the OC character's actual life. I'd like to see some changes there.

I'd also like to point out that Michael would have been cursed when Hinata was three, which would have been when he was two. Along those lines, I do not believe that Michael would have been around the younger students of the Academy much - there was an age difference, and a date of entrance difference.

I'm also wondering why he entered the Academy as late as he did. Most genin are nine or ate when they do so, and are around thirteen when they graduate. What are the circumstances behind that?

RP Sample: This sample, first off, is 109 words long - the sample should follow the rules, which states that role play posts need to be, at the barest bare minimum, 150 words long. You've got a little bit to go, and your post would definitely benefit from more work. I'd also like to remind you that non-canon interactions with canon characters really aren't going to fly - this changes their history, and we are a canon site here at Tale of the Tails. I also felt like your sample was cut off abruptly, and that you could have easily continued typing.

Notes: Check.

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Jutsu: Piercing Fang is a move exclusive to those in the Inuzuka Clan.

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